My first story

Here is a story by Aidan. He was writing at bible class on Wednesday night and this is what he came up with. He was writing a story about being Dash…from the Incredibles of course. He wrote this and then he helped me to translate it into to what is at the bottom of this post. We made sure to tell him to make sure to leave spaces next time, as it would be easier to read…and I think it would also help him to keep focused and see what he has already written and what he hasn’t.

I copied this first bit straight from his paper. No spaces, except the one after the word Dash. This is what the top portion of a lined piece of loose leaf paper looked like…well, there were a few backwards letters too! Some S’s and Z’s and an N or 2. He did a great job!

HIIEMDASH IMSOPRIMESHW
OFF SOPRFIMILEDADSMISHN
WIZTODIFEIOMNIDROIDORM
OMWSNOTIBAOISGEDENONUND
WRUORSOPRSMOMSHNCHDI
DADFAODSDRIOMSCIPEYOUDR

(Here it is with the words broken up with spaces between and some punctuation.)

HI IEM DASH. IM SOPR. IM E SHW
OFF. SOPR FIMILE. DADS MISHN
WIZ TO DIFE I OMNIDROID. OR
MOM WZ NOT IBAO IS GEDEN ON. UND
WRU OR SOPR S. MOM CHNCHD I.
DAD FAOD SDRIOMS CIPEYOUDR.

(And here it is translated by him to me…some of it was incomplete as it seems he lost his focus. He did spell omnidroid correctly, but only because he was copying what I had written on another sheet of paper. All the rest of the spelling/misspelling is his own. I was very proud of him. This is the most he has ever written before. And he was so excited about his story!)

Hi, I’m Dash. I’m a super. I’m a show
off. (We are a) super family. Dad’s mission
was to defeat an omnidroid. Our mom
was not (happy) about us getting on (the plane). And
we were in our super s(uits). Mom changed into a (boat). Dad found Syndrome’s computer.

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DAD
MOM
AIDAN
ALORA
ARALYN
WT?
GO
ZOO
BOOK
CAT
DOG
DOLL
CAR
BUG

Daddy

I love my daddy.
He has blue eyes.
Daddy needs to go to work on some days, and not on church days.
He helps me do stuff.
He doesn't let me do all the things that I want to do.
He gets new light blubs for us.
Daddy drives a white van now, but his red car ran out of power.
And, Daddy doesn't have time to clean up his drum room, cause he needs to work.
He preaches at church.
Daddy loves Alora and Aralyn and me too.
And he even loves his wife, Alissa.
I love him.

About me

I like superheroes.
I would want to drive a racecar when I grow up.
I would want to work with my daddy, too.
I love to be with my whole family.
My first baby sister is Alora.
My second baby sister, Aralyn, likes to watch Baby Mozart.
I did some paintings and I do school at my house.
I like school and I like to play games.
I like to play car video games with my Uncle Joshua.
My Uncle Joshua is my friend and uncle.
I like to play computer games, when they are different from each other.
I like to watch fun DVDs.
I like to ride my bike, but it was too late tonight to do that.